Now that was awesome. Good characterization, nice transitions from 'I'm not okay with this' to 'I'm less not-okay with this'. PLAUSIBLE, which is the total deal-breaker for me.
I especially loved the by-play surrounding the sound of people having sex on the other side of the wall. That was a full sale, man, I bought that completely. Very nice.
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Date: 2005-12-14 07:41 am (UTC)I especially loved the by-play surrounding the sound of people having sex on the other side of the wall. That was a full sale, man, I bought that completely. Very nice.
And, um. HOT HOLY HELL. Yis.