FIC LINK: False Comforts - part 8 (Supernatural: Sam, Dean) Mature Audiences

[maygra]

Title: False Comforts Complete
Author: Maygra
Pairing: Not applicable. Sam, Dean.
Notes: Possible spoilers through all aired episodes.
Warnings: The following is a work of fiction. It is meant for mature adults and deals with mature and possibly disturbing themes. Forced to a category, it would be dark fiction and containing both violence and sexual violence. It is a horror story. It's also a love story.

Special Notes: If you are looking for slash, or even pre-slash, you can probably find it, but really? You're trying too hard. [*G*]

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Comments

[shealynn88.livejournal.com]

Oh, what an awesome ending! They're healing...and there's a possibility for more, right? Since they are Legion? And there was a kiss. Sweet! Just to prove that it's all okay, that Dean's not like the shifters. I like why Sam killed Kerry...it's nice to see him sort of grown up. So often he's in Dean's shadow.

You rock!!! I can't wait til you write MORE!! :)

[maygra.livejournal.com]

Gald you liked it! Jsut tying up some loose ends and yeah...they are healing.

[luvjlb.livejournal.com]

I cannot say enough about how much I enjoyed this story. I love the interaction between the guys, the way you revealed bits and pieces about each one of them as the story progressed. Please tell me that you have something else in the works, because it would surely make my day to look forward to more of your wonderful work! Thanks for sharing!

[maygra.livejournal.com]

Thank you so muc. I'm glad it worked so well for you!

I promise nothing, but any new fandom tends to spawn ideas really quickly for me, so we'll see. Plus, I think next wee'ks ep is likely to be yet another ep that spawns a thousand stories.

[digital-opium.livejournal.com]

Lovely story.

I loved seeing Sam realize that perhaps Dean needs a little reassurance and comfort sometimes, too, there at the end.

Thank you very much for a really good read!

[maygra.livejournal.com]

I think Dean definitely needs reassurance, but I think he's learned differnet ways of getting. Sam's jsut...man, it's all out there on his face [g].

[meko00.livejournal.com]

Mmm, yes. :-) Very satisfying end to this story. Thank you, it was lovely. My brain is fried, otherwise I'd comment on specific things. I think.

[maygra.livejournal.com]

That you enjoyed it is comment enough. Thanks!

[southernwinds.livejournal.com]

Okay, I'm once again in awe.

But let's summarize:

That was low-key, with deeper undercurrents that you really have to hunt for. I reread several parts, looking for some tones underneath and really having to focus on this story to make sure I took it all in.

The actual confrontation was perfect--I read mostly gen, but the Wincest I do read is tiring because they acknowledge the fact that they're brothers, then go on anyway. This acknowledged their brothers and you showed that it wasn't just acknowledgement, it was an outright refusal.

It was nearly exactly as I expected it to be, especially with Dean. You have his character nailed, and I think I realized that here:

"Sam, if kissing people is how you prove to yourself they aren't shape shifters, we've got a serious problem here."

It was subtle, and I thank you for that. Too many fics are very blunt, very direct--which is refreshing sometimes, but now it just seems trite. Your's moved into the discussion in a gentle slope, leading up to the climax and getting there just right.

That said, I don't think I liked the ending of the argument as well as the beginning and middle. Er, that is, I didn't like the transition from when Sam confronts Dean and when he wakes up in the morning? I can't quite place why I didn't like it as well, because it would seem to fit, but I just don't. Not to say that it wasn't good, it may just be me. :)

The thing that really made this amazing, I think, was the little things. You didn't just jump right in there with the idea of putting a Beginning, Rising Action, Climax, Falling Action, Conclusion, but with the idea of showing a real story. The seemingly inane discussion about the tornadoes, interspersed with Sam's realization that Dean had been protecting Sam from himself, is what makes it sound believable. I get annoyed with stories that are all direct dialogue relating to the topic. Conversations drift, sometimes there are double meanings, etc. Your talent for showing that really hit me in this chapter.

Ah, I've gone on too long. Needless to say, but I'll say it anyway, it was a spectacular, emotional, and too many words that I can't even begin to list fic and I envy your talent.

Cheers,
Kits

[maygra.livejournal.com]

Hah! You don't really think I'm going to complain aobut a long, rambly, wonderful post about my fic, do you? I mean, I can try not to let it go to my head...but seriously? SQEEEE!! I love it when people just say "liked it Thanks", but I also like knowing why and what worked and what didn't

That said, I don't think I liked the ending of the argument as well as the beginning and middle. Er, that is, I didn't like the transition from when Sam confronts Dean and when he wakes up in the morning? I can't quite place why I didn't like it as well, because it would seem to fit, but I just don't. Not to say that it wasn't good, it may just be me. :)

It's may alos be me. That whole section -- the whole driving emotional guilty reaction that started the entire attack on Sam, is while not complicated... still difficult to lay out without it coming off like a Jung lecture.

Sam's explaantion doesn't satisfy Dean. In my own head, there's a huge collision here between the fact that Sam has always wanted a normal life, and at this point he's not likely to get it. And Dean knows it.

But that's really hard to communicate a) from Sam's POV or B) without it being incredibly boring rationalizing exposition. It hink a more skilled writer than I could probalby pull it off...but I fear in some case, when I cna't satisfy myself with how soemthing plays, I'll opt to the let the characters be less than satisfied too -- it's kinf a weird way to inject realism in a story and sometimes it works better than others.

But if the overall emotional impact of it worked for you, then I'm going to feel pretty satisfied. And I thank you very kindly or telling me waht did work.

[(Anonymous)]

Beautiful! A wonderful ending to a wonderful story. You captured the relationship between Sam and Dean perfectly. They care for each other, but tend to try to downplay it and act like tough guys, even though it's evident. I could totally hear Death Cab for Cutie's "Brothers on a Hotel Bed" playing in the background of the last scene. Thanks for sharing such an interesting and well-written story!

[maygra.livejournal.com]

You are welcome and thank you for the lovely compliments. I'm glad you enjoyed it...and now I have to go find the lyrics to that song!

[may-burrows.livejournal.com]

Wow. I waited to read seven and eight until after I had taken my criminological theory exam today, even though it was killing me. When I finally DID get to sit down and read them, I realized why I love your work so much. This story is absolutely amazing. You're handling a really delicate topic with so much finesse and skill that it's just... perfect. I applaud you for that-- for going with your instincts, just letting it flow and not trying to force anything.

And your plot? Is nothing short of mind-blowing. And I'll say it again. You develop these characters the way I wish WB would. I mean, I realize that they only have an hour a week and blah blah blah, but... they just sporadically, haphazardly scratch the surface here and there. Oh, Dean has issues about Sam and college. Oh, look, Sam has issues about Dean and their father. Oh, they fight, but they still love each other. Oh no look out, bugs, oh, yay, the sun, the end. You've really taken a lot of time to think about these guys (not a hardship, I'm sure) and their motives and individual identities. That's what makes this (and really, everything you do) so stellar. *sends you major internet blessings or something of the sort*

[may-burrows.livejournal.com]

Ok, let me do this one last time. First it double posted. Then it wanted the whole thing in italics. Campus internet, why must you do this to meeeeee??

And (of course, as I am wonderfully disjointed today), I forgot to mention how much I enjoy Sam-- the way he's protective of Dean-- Sam had wanted them all, any that were listening in on those dying thoughts, to know he'd been the one to put a bullet in Kerry's brain. Sympathy and empathy aside, he wanted them to know if they wanted Dean they'd have to go through Sam. The reverse had always been true. I never even thought of it in this way-- but now that I read it, it just makes perfect sense.

And I wanted to mention that you handled the Wincest (is that what we're calling it now, I think? It's an apt term.) I especially love the way they talk about it in the dark-- it's so true to life. You can always say more when it's dark. And it's so... I don't know. How Sam's accepted it, and knows that they're not fucked up because of it, and how Dean finally, in the end, accepts what he can-- that he'll never hurt Sam, and that Sam will never hurt him. And that's all that they need, right now. And that's just so... perfect. (Haha, I'm less articulate than ever before today-- exams turn my brain to jelly.)

And now I swear I'm done. I think. :)

[maygra.livejournal.com]

Hee. I didn't mind the double posting. Your feed back thrilled me every time.

Yeah, it's called Wincest...although even if I go there, I'm not sure I'll call it that. I'd rather deal with it as it is...makes me more careful [g].(although I'm kind of find of "BroYay!". That one cracks me up.)

But I'm sincerely glad you enjoyed it so much. I can say (and mean) that I largely write for myself, but posting is all aobut the sharing and the feedback and the fun and the cool discussions. I'd say 90% of my ideas come out of just random discussions...(and I do kind of miss that about mailing lists.)

I like them having a more even realtionship. It's not completely equal -- Dean will always be older and I think Sam will always be more serious. Dean's got his serious deep side -- even his wounded and damaged side, but he's not nearly so open about it...

And yes. I think at that point Sam wanted the shifters to know that if tehy were coming afeter one, they were coming after both. Not entirely rational (but then he wans't in the best mental or phsyical shape) but he was pretty clear of about what kind of damage something happening to him would inflict on Dean.

yup, definitely stronger together.

Thank you so much!

[(Anonymous)]

Beautifully written. Thank you for sharing. I admit that Wincest bothers me a lot and if I run across it by accident, I always stop reading. But the way this story is written makes it so that I could finish the story. I think you captured the characters' voices really well. I look forward to reading more of your stories.

[maygra.livejournal.com]

Aw, Thank you! I'm so glad. It's relly very flattering to find that this sotry has a such a broad appeal.

[halfshellvenus.livejournal.com]

What a glorious, long story.

Very satisfying on so many levels. The unexpected twists of a "resurrected" shapeshifter, and then another. The psychological torture of the brothers, leading, as you say, mostly to get revenge on Dean.

The slashy stuff was very hot, and very effective in the Shapeshifter personality.

And when the one shapeshifter became Kerry... I found myself reviewing that whole conversation Sam had with her in the car, where she said her brother had died when he met up with someone cockier and more dangerous than he was. At the time, you could see Sam thinking the same could happen to Dean someday. And later, when you realize who her 'brother' was-- a very nice turnabout.

I also liked the ending, and the untwisting of all the doubts and worries. Very sweet and resolved.

This was a really marvelous piece altogether. Brava.

[maygra.livejournal.com]

Thank you, so much! It's been a seriously fun story to write and it;s been great having people like you , willing to kind of nudge and enjoye right along with me. I'm so glad you enjoyed it!

[quietdiscerning.livejournal.com]

This was so many things, it's hard to pin them down, but first and foremost it was so powerful.

The feelings and the emotions came through so strongly and perfectly. You did an amazing job.

I really loved this fic, it really showed the love between the brothers and the fear that they felt and I really liked the use of the Shapeshifters. They are such a scary prospect, the idea that something can become you so totally and still not be you...but could hurt the people you love...its freaky.

I loved this fic. I loved your Dean and Sam.

[cereta.livejournal.com]

I've been meaning for days to tell you how much I loved this story. The whole tone of it could just not possibly be truer to the show than it is, even as it teases out and explores some of the things going on under the surface of what we see on screen. I just loved it.

[maygra.livejournal.com]

Oh, thank you! That means a lot to me -- you have no idea. Thank you so much, hon!

[(Anonymous)]

This is wonderful, Ms. Maygra! You got Dean and Sam's voices down perfectly! This story is very creepy and fits well into the whole premise of "Supernatual", except, for the, you know, erotic horror thing that WB would never approve of. This story is great! Thank you very much!

[cathybites.livejournal.com]

I don't even know what to say about this fic. It was just so unbelievably good. Your characterizations were spot-on, it had a fascinating and believable storyline, and it was just so...complete. After I finished reading it the first time, I just sat at my computer and stared at the screen because it really left me in such awe.

and because I'm lazy and want to do it all at once, I just wanted to say the coda to this, 'Welcome to Memphis', was every bit as good. The way you brought Sam and Dean together was...well, I don't know if 'natural' is really the word for it, but it made sense, seemed inevitable in a way.

Both of these stories are just gorgeous and delicious.

Gripping. . . and wonderful

[jdsampson.livejournal.com]

I don't hand out fan fic praise lightly, but I've been so amazed by the calibre of work I've found in this fandom! Great stuff. And being a "dark" junkie, your stuff really grabs me! I know I should point out specifics but can't seem to make my brain cooperate. Characters are perfect - there were spots where I could SO hear the voices and I had to laugh. Dean always gets the best lines. The plot was also a good choice - anything that leads to brotherly angst wins my vote.

Playing devil's advocate a bit - I read your other two stories in this continuing saga and at times I feel like it gets a bit bogged down in inner thoughts. I like the inner thoughts, but I like the interaction even better . . give me more of our boys walking the walk and talking the talk.

I'll look forward to it!

JD

Re: Gripping. . . and wonderful

[maygra.livejournal.com]

Thank you, JD. I'm glad you enjoyed False Comforts. I admit the other two are far more internal, far more reflective than action based which FC was. There were sections I edited out because as delightful as the snark can be, it kind of felt out of place in the other two (personal choice), although I hope to use some of the dialogue elsewhere. I don't disagree with you though -- half the fun of these two is the brotherly sniping, no argument.

So, I'm sorry the other two were less to your liking, and not in keeping with the timbre of the show overall, and I thank you very much for letting me know what you did enjoy as well as what you didn't. I sincerely appreciate your taking the time to do so.

[thelovelygirl.livejournal.com]

I love your stories. I think I've re-read your FatF fic, Unfinished Business, about twelve times. It's so great. And then I saw that you had some Supernatural fic. So awesome. I'm not really into Highlander or Mag7 myself, but once I read your stories I'm sure I will convert into a huge fan. Thanks so much for writing the fanfiction you write! I really enjoy it! :)

[jellicle.livejournal.com]

I've read all four stories of this series and although incest is not my thing I have to agree that you're writing in such a love story way that it is hard to not find yourself wantingh, wishing them to be happy. The third story, Falling Rocks, I think, was a little confusing with the whole dream inside a dream inside a dream. When the scenarios kept changing I felt ther was something wrong, like some continuity mistake or pieces posted in not the right sequence, then you made it clear that they are dreams inside dreams but even after that it was hard to distinguish reality and dream. The latest chapter was great, not only because the boys are discovering real love between them but that they also found their way, their strenght to fight the shape shifters, and they are no longer simply being hunt but they are back on hunting as well. Just running away, they didn't feel like themselves because they weren't being themselves. And now, facing the shape shifters mother, they have a big head up: if she is full demon, although she is probably stronger, she can definitely be vanquished.
Great work. Can I friend you?

[tabaqui]

Someone rec'd you, damnit. No clue who.

BUT! Lovely stuff. I like that this was more about trust and desire and intentions than about sex, and i liked that there was a core of truth to everything that the shapeshifters said.

Very skeery, very pretty, very, very good.

[trystan830.livejournal.com]

maygra!
i was reccomended to read this fic by Diamondback... awesome, if not creepy, stuff there.

i do have only one question though: you call it a A Supernatural AU. what was so "AU" about it?

~Trys (http://www.deadjournal.com/users/trystan830/)

[zenamydog.livejournal.com]

OMGGGGGGGGGG this was sooooooooo good! Brilliantly written. I sat down and read the entire thing in one hit. OHHHHHH gunna read the follow ups tomorrow. Wow !!!!! THANKYOU!!!!!!

[maygra.livejournal.com]

Wow. Thank you very, very much. I'm glad you enjoyed it!

[singyourmelody.livejournal.com]

Love it. :D

[maygra.livejournal.com]

Thank you very much!

[laminy.livejournal.com]

Oh my god. Wow. This is so great, and probably one of, if not the best, Supernatural fics I've ever read. Hell, fics of any fandom. Love it. Everything about it. Every single letter, space and comma, is just- wow.

[84sash.livejournal.com]

wow.. it was a very well thought out story and perfectly executed!!! all i can say is wow.. ;-)

[maygra.livejournal.com]

Thank you very much!

[obeetaybee.livejournal.com]

Alrighty. I'm not even sure if you're still getting these notices or not, but damn, girl, why are you not writing for this show?

Your ideas and your research are amazing and I think the writers would have a lot to learn from you. These boys, the way you write them is so in character and so easy to visualize while reading.

You totally kicked my ass with this one. whoo.

[maygra.livejournal.com]

Thank you so very much! I'm glad their cahracters are still translating so very well for you. Thank you so much for commenting!

[jb_slasher]

*falls over*

That?

Was breathtaking.

OW.

It hurts. And it's okay.

*loves*

[maygra.livejournal.com]

Thank you so much. I'm glad you liked it (And apologies for taking so long to get back to you.)